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I am ready to read the next instalment of this immediately, please and thank you.

You have mentioned how difficult it can be to receive constructive criticism, and I'm just some lady from the interwebs, but here's my two cents:

Clearly, you know how to write, and you do it well. (That almost shouldn't need to be said, but I'm sure you've also had the experience of looking through some "bestseller" and being appalled by the quality of the prose.) I personally really like the scene/time shifts, and your lyricism and refinement. Your prose is tight and robust.

I appreciate that you "show don't tell," but I suspect your chief complaint from a wider commercial audience could be something like "I don't really understand what the character is," or "I don't know what's happening." To be clear, there is a lot I don't understand either, but I trust the author [heh] will reveal more as the story unfolds.

And anyways the magic is in the not-understanding, the wondering, the liminal space between the words, the worlds, the mysterious nexus of creation and imagination. Please keep doing what you're doing! Do more of it!

Tl;Dr bro you got any more of them dopeass stories??

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